Dear Haley

I like your idea for Sarah, but I feel like she would be a little ungrateful then. How about, after that incident, Patrick thinks its time for him to 'make his move' and ask Sarah out, and she is not about to let that happen. She thinks Patrick is nice, but not that nice, and with his request mounted on top of her slowly growing feelings for Patrick, she snaps and has a breakdown.

Also, I like how you want to add depth to Aria's character. Because, just like we are trying to prove in this story, no one is all anything (all good, all bad, all perfect, all faulted etc.)