suggestions SPOILER ALERT

hey colleen! weve been really busy today posting stuff. i was gonna email you these suggestions, but you said we should do most of our planning here. so anyway, i was thinking about ways we could make what we have so far even better. do you think you could maybe email me, or post the whole story? heres some ideas!!! BIG SPOILER ALERT! IF YOU DONT WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS, DO NOT READ ON.

• i think instead of sarah just BAM, falling in love with johnson, id like to see sarah fall in love with him, so maybe that "spark" could come later on.
• i think soon we should definately give a description of the orphanage, maybe as sarah and john go throughout their daily chores.
• there needs to be a lot of symbolism and a lot of foreshadowing. a lot of thought should go into mood too, maybe we can look on the internet for tips on that stuff.
• now that ive been writing through kats eyes i think she should have a bigger part, but she should die. for sure.
• we need it to have an overall message, and none of this change the world crap. johnson was misunderstood right? thats why they thought he was evil, but he ended up curing cancer? heres my idea for the message: human beings are stupid and flawed, so no matter what we do everythings gonna end up screwed. it doesnt matter how much effort we put into things, we are going to fail.
• do you think that message is too dark? we could go for something happier like: a person is not always what they seem to be, people change, try to see things through their eyes.
• i like the darker one, but its really your story. i think we should do like a flash to the future, to give people some more hints.

what do you think?